wrenfeather - boneclan

[acez]

Name: Wrenfeather
Age: 34 moons
Gender: she-cat
Rank: warrior
Clan: boneclan
Personality: Wrenfeather is not lazy, she merely 'lacks motivation' and hates to be even thought of lazy. She enjoys sleep and hates effort, work and often will slack off her duty for an extra moments of sleep. In fact, Wrenfeather is known to slack off and disappear for hours on end. Some have tried to follow her, but she either disappears, or they find that she does nothing but sleep. Get past her 'lack of motivation', and you find a strictly loyal, if not pessimistic person. Her loyalty comes straight from the heart, and though it takes some time, she will fight for anything she believes in. Her pessimism comes from a past filled with hurt and bitterness. In fact, her sarcastic tongue and rebellious nature comes from rebelling against her father. In fact, her temper that rises and the sarcastic tongue. The bitterness that she can show to an enemy can make people stop and stare, so similar to her father that she will turn on any clan mate that say she's her father's daughter.
However, Wrenfeather is a joker, a laugher and has a habit of nick-naming anyone and everyone she sees. Her father taught her the hard way how to fight and properly defend herself, the cause of most of the scars on her body, half of the stuff she knows comes from her father's secret training, not her mentor. Not only that, she can make Tigerstar blush with the words that pour from her mouth when she gets angry. So, just watch where you step. She is a great friend, although she isn't very well liked. She is very blunt, truthful. Wrenfeather tells you the things you may not want to hear.
Physical Description:

Wrenfeather is easy to spot in a crowd. Her shaggy long fur sticks up at all ends, giving her a wild look. Her coat is mottled with arrays of brown, from the lightest shade of tan to the darkest burnt brown. Every now and then, you'll see a flicker of orange and grey, with a long bushy tail that gets stuck in bushes. Another distinguishing features is the lynx-like tips that is the only feature she has from her mother.
But if you look past that small feature, Wrenfeather takes after her father in looks, and would be a beautiful she-cat if her body wasn't laced with scars. What scars aren't covered by her fur, can be ugly and brutal. In fact, it is eerie how alike to her father in looks she is. Her back is has the same crossed scars like her father and with her mottled coat and the same white, wiry whiskers which was her father's definable trait, she could be her father's twin sister instead of daughter.
Her walk is not always confident, but edged and tensed. When she isn't tense, she is lazy, almost drunk with sleep. Staggering on her feet, she has neither a hunter's legs, or a warrior's build, but a bit of both.
History: Wrenfeather's history begins with her parents. Featherheart was a wild she-cat, with a heart made out of gold, but insatiable thirst for adventure. Chazz was a lurking alley cat who had saved Featherheart when she crossed into two-leg territory. Having fallen head over heels for the bloody one, Featherheart brought him home, and Chazz became Wildclaw. Wildclaw had his doubts about Starclan but he loved Featherheart and proved the perfect warrior for Boneclan. Soon, Wrenkit and Loudkit were born, their sibling stillborn and buried right away. Both Wildclaw and Featherheart loved their kits with all their hearts, and wasn't until six moons, when Wrenkit, now Wrenpaw and Loudkit, Loudpaw were apprentices that Featherheart was killed over a skirmishes with the borders. Wildclaw went a little over the top, accidentally hurting his own clanmates in the fray. Wrenfeather remembers watching her father bury her mother, snarling at any cat that tried to show any grievances or tried to help the tom.
Wildclaw was harsh, and not pleased with their mentor's teachings, he dragged his children out and showed them how to kill. However one night, Wrenpaw woke up and didn't feel Loudpaw beside her. Frightened, the entire camp was turned upside down, but they never found him. Wrenfeather was broken inside and although Boneclan held a ceremony for Loudpaw, Wrenfeather refused to believe that Loudpaw was dead. His son's lost only made Wildclaw more desperate to change his daughter and during one of those training sessions that Wildclaw raked his claws down her back and left her there to bleed. He never returned. Instead, Boneclan found his body and the body of another cat, the cat that had Wrenfeather's mother, locked in battle, even in death. At her father's funeral, she stared. Didn't even shed a tear.

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[Brackentail]

Your physical description is extremely close to the standard; just four words are missing from the 200-mark.
Also in the physical description lie two typographical errors:
"Wrenfather" in the second paragraph, and "twn sister," also in the second paragraph.
In your history, there is a line which states: "Wrenfeather remembers watching her father bury his mother." I'm sure Featherheart wasn't Wildclaw's mother, so shouldn't that "his" be "her" to refer to Wrenfeather?

Other than those mistakes, your character is good. Just meet the 200-mark, fix the typos, and you're set!

[acez]

don't you hate it when that happens!? xD everything is fixed! Promise!

[Brackentail]

Yeah. XD
But good, your promise is met! It's accepted. C:
Locked and moved!